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to marble floors and echoing corridors,
my tongue can find no response.
though the shires and moors these shadows implore,
none knows exactly what it wants.

I still remember the gold of November
when the hour was getting late,
and despite the last of the timber, the last burning ember
still I stood there to wait.

and let it suffice to say it was nice
to think of holding you near
and rolling the dice as I fall through the ice:
nothing I ever should fear.

the skin of your soft hand a silent symphony
pressed against the window of a moving train.
watching the country side rolling by
as your tears fall like summer rain.

it was only yesterday you told me,
like those old songs you'd always sung,
how you wanted to live forever,
but please, let me die young.
©2004-2009 ~tangenthoughts
:icontangenthoughts:

Author's Comments

Just some lyrics I was writing today in Creative Writing . . . need some work, but decided to post for feedback. Thinking about sharing this one at the coffee house thing.

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:iconpurple-people-eater:
I love your lyrics!! They're Awesome!! Unfortunately I don't have the knack of writing lyrics but you do and they're really good!! Well done!
:icondeadrose828:
did i mention that i always love all your poetry...? (when i can understand it)
=) good job, needless to say

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:boing: Ema :boing:
:bug: 'Just when the caterpillar thought the world was ending, he became a butterfly.' :butterflytwo:
:glomp:s to ~xXchopsueyXx, ~ razorbladeloveaffair, and ~ tangenthoughts...and the rest of you guys, who don't post :bleh:
:iconniceparabola:
I really, really like this.

Your rhyming scheme is so subtle, and I'm usually opposed to rhyming in poems, because it can come of as really cheesy, but you did this so right.

Yeah, this is just magnificent, and I've read through some of your other stuff, and it was all really great.


Alie

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you don't belong where the humans eat - willy mason
:iconmsstarryskye:
gold of november - love that line :)
Thanks for the comment on my poem which led me to your lovely gallery!
:icondandy-poshlost:
Well done, Matt. Is there any sheet music to this piece? I would like to know how it goes.
:icontangenthoughts:
Unfortunately, I know absolutely nothing about composition. I'll sing it for you sometime and you can write it down and we'll start a band.

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